The Attraction of The Young Man!

[Nyx]

Well...Almost all my poems ..Are romantic .. It's not my fault that i'm a Teenage
It's the longest one that i made so far...
I'm good in english ..But i believe the poem have some mistakes .. So ..Don't be harsh with me guys ..When you judge at it :p
It's like a conversation one .. BTW ..Sorry for making it too long and boring one & Please ..it's not that good for whom under 18 >>Like she's 18 one :p

~The Attraction of The Young Man~

I had found a young man...Sleeping in the forest having some REST.
I couldn't distract my eyes from him ...Was almost like a pretty cute baby but what i most prefered on him was his sexy CRUST.
Cause i was too close from him... He awaked and the first thing that he saw was my BREAST.
Him: hi there, what's the problem?...I answered him: it just having a man like you is the BEST.
He didn't get what my meaning was so i said:... sorry for annoying you if you want me to go i won't mind to disappear like a GUST.
Him: no it's ok even that i couldn't understood you... But at least can i invite you to my house as a GUEST?.
Me: OMG,thanks a lot nice from you to do that...I'll try to keep my desire even after the sun SET.
I saw lots of question marks above his head, me:how about talkin about you....Where are you from? Him: I'm from greece it's in the mid EAST.
Me: no kiddin, your look is so calm quite beautiful & gorgeous personality kinda like whom from the WEST.
Him: Babe don't overrate with me, and why do you say such things?...Me: it just i couldn't find your character in one man from my LIST.
He laughed, laughed loudly he was extremely gorgeous...For me i smiled but also my desire controled at me so i hugged him to my CHEST.
He surprised from doing me this But he turned his arms around me and hugged me tightly...Him: Dear how about sharing and TEST?


There's still more ..But i'm tired now ..So i will complete it later

[Unknown]

Pretty good overall, but there were some parts I didn't understand like the line "what i most prefered on him was his sexy CRUST"-- I didn't understand what CRUST is supposed to mean..

[Nyx]

Originally Posted by Unknown

Pretty good overall, but there were some parts I didn't understand like the line "what i most prefered on him was his sexy CRUST"-- I didn't understand what CRUST is supposed to mean..

Thank you so much .. Well ..I meant by that like ..He'as wearing a shirt which it was open & it show he's chest while he was sleeping

The completion for it :- >>>Sorry i know it's kinda stupid completion

I shocked from his ques, Me: If your meaning in the bed...Sorry but if that so please calm down your STATE.
Him: no honey you got me wrong, i meant let's get married...Me : dear don't be too HASTE.
Me: actually you shouldn't say like this to me, i do adore you but...Your life with me will be WASTE.
He hugged me again & said: Don't say such STUPID ideas like this again... And with or without your accepting, you are my partner in my NEST.

THE END

I hope you guys had at least read it :p

[Unknown]

Originally Posted by Nyx

Thank you so much .. Well ..I meant by that like ..He'as wearing a shirt which it was open & it show he's chest while he was sleeping

The completion for it :- >>>Sorry i know it's kinda stupid completion

I shocked from his ques, Me: If your meaning in the bed...Sorry but if that so please calm down your STATE.
Him: no honey you got me wrong, i meant let's get married...Me : dear don't be too HASTE.
Me: actually you shouldn't say like this to me, i do adore you but...Your life with me will be WASTE.
He hugged me again & said: Don't say such STUPID ideas like this again... And with or without your accepting, you are my partner in my NEST.

THE END

I hope you guys had at least read it :p

Ah, that makes sense now.

[fazenda]

Originally Posted by Unknown

Ah, that makes sense now.

it does? I've never heard "crust" used in this way.

[Nyx]

Originally Posted by Unknown

Ah, that makes sense now.

Glad that you got it...

Originally Posted by fazenda

it does? I've never heard "crust" used in this way.

Well ..Fazzy ..Sorry that you still don't ..It just i wanted to match for the poem ... I know what your opinion ..
I knew from the 1st time that there will be some people will hate it ...
After all it's an opinion only

[Csylene]

Well, I didn't understand what "crust" mean at first. I thought it was his skin or something.

[Nyx]

Originally Posted by Csylene

Well, I didn't understand what "crust" mean at first. I thought it was his skin or something.

Well..Sorry for that ..But atleast ..Thanks for reading it

[girlyblack]

Originally Posted by Nyx

Well...Almost all my poems ..Are romantic .. It's not my fault that i'm a Teenage
It's the longest one that i made so far...
I'm good in english ..But i believe the poem have some mistakes .. So ..Don't be harsh with me guys ..When you judge at it :p
It's like a conversation one .. BTW ..Sorry for making it too long and boring one & Please ..it's not that good for whom under 18 >>Like she's 18 one :p

~The Attraction of The Young Man~

I had found a young man...Sleeping in the forest having some REST.
I couldn't distract my eyes from him ...Was almost like a pretty cute baby but what i most prefered on him was his sexy CRUST.
Cause i was too close from him... He awaked and the first thing that he saw was my BREAST.
Him: hi there, what's the problem?...I answered him: it just having a man like you is the BEST.
He didn't get what my meaning was so i said:... sorry for annoying you if you want me to go i won't mind to disappear like a GUST.
Him: no it's ok even that i couldn't understood you... But at least can i invite you to my house as a GUEST?.
Me: OMG,thanks a lot nice from you to do that...I'll try to keep my desire even after the sun SET.
I saw lots of question marks above his head, me:how about talkin about you....Where are you from? Him: I'm from greece it's in the mid EAST.
Me: no kiddin, your look is so calm quite beautiful & gorgeous personality kinda like whom from the WEST.
Him: Babe don't overrate with me, and why do you say such things?...Me: it just i couldn't find your character in one man from my LIST.
He laughed, laughed loudly he was extremely gorgeous...For me i smiled but also my desire controled at me so i hugged him to my CHEST.
He surprised from doing me this But he turned his arms around me and hugged me tightly...Him: Dear how about sharing and TEST?


There's still more ..But i'm tired now ..So i will complete it later

wow its an awesome story.... i think the guy likes the girl also... i'm looking forward to the continuation.... you've got a talent darli'n... keep it up... i'm also a person like to write a poem... if you want i can lend you one of my poems.... if its okay to you...

[Tyranno]

Wow.... 0.0