Zodiac chapter 6

[Nightmare]

Chapter 6

Danny got back to the hotel just as his parents did.
“Hi,” he said.
His parents turned and his dad said. “Hello, are you here as a tourist too?
“I should be! I came with you didn’t I?”Danny responded jokingly
“What are you talking about?” Danny’s mom inquired.
“You’re acting really weird mom” Danny said worry entering his voice.
“Mom!” Danny’s mom replied indignantly. “I don’t know who you are, but my husband and I don’t have any children.”
Now Danny was really shocked. Why was his mom acting this way? “But-” he started but the man cut him off.
“Now, you listen young man,” he said severely. “I don’t know who you are. But If you were my son I would b ashamed to have you teasing people like this,” and with that the couple swept off into the hotel.
“What is going on?” Danny asked himself. Why would his mom and dad do that? The strange thin was, they actually seemed to believe what they were saying. His mind was reeling, and then he blacked. But apparently while his mind made a sojourn into oblivion; his body felt the need to move, because the next thing Danny knew he was running into the back wall of a dead end ally. Danny lay there huffing and puffing until he herd a sound from behind and scrambled to his feet and saw a man silhouetted in the moonlight.
“Give me your money,” the man said.
“What?” said Danny, at first not comprehending what was happening. Then his eyes widened as it dawned on him that h was being mugged, he stumbled back into the wall and realized that he was trapped.
“I said give me your money!” the man repeated, this time Danny saw a glint of metal off the blade of a knife. Then things got hazy vaguely noticed he was running towards his assailant, something he felt was stupid considering the mugger had a knife. But it was like Danny was watching the events unfold from a grate distance; he no longer had any say in what he did. He saw the knife coming at him. But he sidestepped and knocked his opponent down with a solid kick to the face, and leapt into the air. He was set to come down on top of the assailant but then there was flash of movement as something large came from behind him and just to the right, but it was to fast to see what. Then there was a crash and he was himself, he was bent over his opponent so that there noses were almost touching, his right hand was placed on the left side of the muggers head and his left was in the air. Danny’s breath came in shallow gasps, he had just fought a mugger but he wasn’t scared, and despite his breathing he didn’t feel tired either, he felt… pleasure, Exhilaration? Danny realized he was still bent over the mugger who was now obviously terrified, so he stood strait. As soon as he did, it was as if the man woke up from a dream. He began inching away from Danny, then he flipped over and started to scurry away all the time screaming. “You’re a freak! you here me a freak!” Then he ran like all of hell was after him.
“What did he mean freak?” Danny asked aloud. “I wonder where that fighting stuff came from?” then he remembered the movement he had seen just before he had finished the fight. He looked down and saw what it was. There a fraction of an inch to the right of where the mugger had been was what looked like a massive scorpion tail. A closer inspection of it confirmed that it was definitely a scorpion tail, but it was way too big and what’s more there was ice around it. Danny reasoned that if there was a tail it must be coming out of something. So he followed its length and found where it was coming from. After a few seconds of processing this information Danny screamed. The tail was coming from… him! Danny ha a tail!
The world seemed to spin then, everything went dark.

[SmokedBoo]

LE GASP!!!! I would freak out too if some old crone talked about destiny, my parents told me they had no children, I beat the living hell out of a guy trying to mug me without even knowing the fighting skills, and finding a scorpion tail coming from my rectum. o.O
Fascinating, but the story is moving very fast. A little too fast if you ask me. I suppose next chapter there will be the fated meeting of the two who's destinies are intertwined.

That tail was most definitely a "WTF!?" moment. o.O

[Nightmare]

boo, I'm going to level with ya. The exposition is ten chapters long, most books have an exposition of two or three chapters... So I don't think you have to worry about things moving to fast.

[Fox Girl]

Wow..really good story..when are you going to do the next one?

[Nightmare]

I have it written out, but I need to get it edited... I suppose I could post it now and do the editing later seeing as I can't get it edited until I get back to school (spring break). Tell me what you want me to do and I'll do it.

[Fox Girl]

OK..I will read it and tell you want I think. ^^

[Nightmare]

Um dose that mean I should go head and post it?

[Fox Girl]

Yes..sorry..I forgot that you didn't put it up. I want to read it! *jump up and down*

[Nightmare]

Alright I'll post the rest of what I have.