My Word, I Promise

[Ariya]

Here's a little poem I wrote. It's my favorite out of everything I've written.

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When you cry
lay out thy Sun
and when a Sun Cries
Catch the glowing
Petals of snow and rain

Gain the white in pain
In which Love and Surrender
are Treasured and Forgiven
All is Deceived,
in this Black Sun's blessed fantasy

Blessed be the truth that we,
Foolish mortals seeking
the lost fires of friendship,
can live on, Shrouded
Inside the white darkness

And if be had a chance to Kiss
this Empty, Early, love,
forever Lost in a Web of Shadows,
then friendship Melts the rain and snow,
Reaching out to a white sun

[nejih94]

awsome,i can write rock and metal lyrics,but thats about it*LOL*

[Ariya]

Thank you~

Just practice, and someday you'll be amazing at it.

[silkshadow]

its nice a lil off rythm in some places to my tastes
but in general i think its good

[leerock89]

//Blessed be the truth that we,
Foolish mortals seeking
the lost fires of friendship,
can live on, Shrouded
Inside the white darkness//

loved that part

[Ariya]

Thanks. ^^ Glad you like it~

[Thoza]

i Dont Get It What This Writing.....
but Its Cool ^^ i Like It

[Ariya]

It's poetry...Of course you aren't going to get it. Poetry comes from the author's thoughts or feelings. Read between the lines and maybe then you'll understand the full meaning.

[Thoza]

yups i know its poetry.......
i just do a poetry about sadness or sorrow...... lonely..... that's all
welll you do cool

[Gogo]

Very nice stuff, I like it. I don't like most poetry so you know you've hit something. I implore you to write more stuff.