Two poems, because it's been too long.

[suigintou]

Really, how long has it been since I posted here? I mean in a way I don't have a reason to post any writing here anyway because it's not like I'll get much constructive feedback, but still, sometimes it's nice to just...get stuff out there.


American Greek

I saw a city, breathing,
a hallmark house upon a hill,
with neon lights and poetry.

I saw a preacher, preaching,
an upside-down Bible in his hand.
And the ladies nodded.

I saw an otter, stone dead,
stiff with a rocky spine.
The flies hovered around
his crooked teeth.


Urban

The squirrels scamper up streetlights,
their tails a neon glow.
Turtles rest in the gutter,
smoking a pack a day.

[Zero Ichi]

hmmm i like them, the decay of modern society is an ugly one indeed!
(if thats what you actually meant, but thats what i see)

[Koopaking]

I'm glad you've finally decided to share some of your notorious writings with us Suig. I like your style - nice, short, and simple poems are often some of the best.

[suigintou]

Zero, don't assume poems to only have one meaning, ever. If you can come up with your own meaning in a poem, then great! Stick to it. The author's intentions don't always have to dominate. :3 Thank you though.

When I had written these, it wasn't really so much a "decay of modern society" thing...the first is just a series of barely connected images of modern day, not so much pessimistic as realistic...and the second poem, I dunno, I just threw some animals into New York City and let them run around. :3 There were no real "deep" intentions in either poems. But I'm glad people can find depth in poems regardless.

Koopa, thank you, I didn't expect a response from you. And yes, I'm a huuuuuge fan of chopping things down to bare minimums. Bring out the poem, the message, the feeling, and shake all the extra stuff off that isn't needed. Oh, and actually this isn't the first time I've posted writing here, Koopa, you can always check my history of posting threads to find my other ones.

[Zero Ichi]

well then i apologize suig, ive been yelled at by lots for saying what i think a poem meant, yes there are stuck-up bitches at the art institutes, and i tried to avoid having you scold me for saying my own meaning, thinking you were like them but i guess i was wrong, but either way, im glad your not one of them

[suigintou]

Originally Posted by Zero Ichi

well then i apologize suig, ive been yelled at by lots for saying what i think a poem meant, yes there are stuck-up bitches at the art institutes, and i tried to avoid having you scold me for saying my own meaning, thinking you were like them but i guess i was wrong, but either way, im glad your not one of them

Ah yeah...there are lots of people like that who try to limit art's capabilities and try to make everyone see the supposed "right way" instead of letting art be what it really is...flexible. It's very sad.

[Zero Ichi]

yes, whats even more sad is that i dont really know anyone else like this around where i live, just a bunch of stuck-up, line following asses, i like this freedom of judging art without getting glares back, its nice