Aura part 1

[Shi-chan]

"My story... Is bitter sweet. The path I've walked in the name of love is covered in blood. In the end, I lost. I lost my life, and gained an eternity to spend with her. That really is all I could ever want."

"Ahr, I hate mornings like these... It's so cold!" Madison yelled as her and Aura entered their small classroom, "I'd wish summer would hurry up and get here..." Aura smiled at her best friend as they sat down by the desk they shared with each other. "Yeah well, you're just gonna have to wait for it." She looked up at the bell as it rang, and the teacher entered. " 'Morning guys. Did y'all have a nice weekend?" Several students mumbled something in response, but the teacher weren't listening, since it was just something she'd always say. "Okay, get out your books. If anyone haven't done their homework, now's the time to tell me..."
Madison sat for the whole lesson and stared out of the window. Sometimes she couldn't help but sat looking at Aura instead. They looked so different from each other, Aura with her brown hair and green eyes, with her casual style and look of complete and utter boredom on her face. As if she'd seen everything worth seeing. Madison had short, spiky black hair, she always wore a pair of torn jeans and a band shirt, she always looked like she was looking forward to something big and exiting. "Hey, Aura... Looks like there's gonna be a storm..." Madison said and pointed at the black clouds gathering. In the far distance the rumble of thunder could be heard. Aura turned her head and looked out too. "Yeah..." She said as the first drops of rain landed on the window. Suddenly the door slammed open, Men dressed in long black robes ran in, "Where is she?! Where is the Angel?!" one of them shouted, All the students moved to the far away end of the classroom, trying to get as far away from the monk-like men as possible. The teacher walked over to the one looking to be the leader, "What the hell are you doing? This is my--" The man stabbed her in the stomach before she could finish, "Speak not, If you aren't the messenger from God! Step forth angel, and fulfill your destiny!" No one moved, until one of the men stepped forward, and pointed at Madison. "That is her! She is the Angel!" Two others stormed forward, and grabbed Madisons arms, they began pulling her away, "NO! Let her go!" Aura shouted, another man took out a gun. "Erase all..." He began shooting vildly at the students, Aura ducked behind one of her classmates, not caring if he died or not. She heard them walk out, and looked up over the body she'd hidden herself behind. The intire room was covered in blood, no matter where you looked there was somebody dead. She ran over to the classroom across the hall to get help, but when she ran in, no one was there. "Madison..." She turned her head as she heard Madison scream, she ran down the hall and slammed the doors open, she jumped down the few steps lading up to the door, and stopped. "MADISON?!" As she heard Madison yell back, she ran around the building, "Where are you?!" She reached the football field, and saw the monks forming a circle around Madison. Aura ran as fast as she could, as the monks began chanting. Their leader stood next to Madison, with a dagger in his hand he raised it as he spoke, "Let the demon of destruction hear our prayer, let her with this sacrifice enter this world and destroy the non-believers..." Aura broke through the circle, her and Madisons eyes met, in a single second, just before Madison was pierced with the dagger, they both let out a heart-wrenching scream. Aura reached Madisons body, she grabbed her shoulders and shook her gently, "Madison? Madison...? Are you still...?" Madison didn't move, her body became heavier by the second. Now, Aura saw a small light in front of her face, all the monks kept chanting, she could see the evil glow in their eyes, suddenly another light appeared, but this was bigger than the other. The monks sounded more and more scary for every word they said, until... the lights moved to Aura, with incredible speed, it almost looked like they were racing to reach her first. At once a formidable force pushed it's way into her head, there was too many emotions and thoughts, a ton of new memories, she couldn't breathe, she felt her own mind being pushed out of her body, suddenly two voices were clear to her. "Revenge." a new voice, so unfamiliar, and then there was Madisons, "Sorry..." Her body began moving on it's own, long silvery tentacles grew out from the top of her back, right undeneath her neck. Some of them moved towards the nearest monk and forced their way down his throat, choking him. She heard the unfamiliar voice from her own mouth, "How dare you bring me to this world, unworthy humans...?

[Nightmare]

Okay first thing Iknoteced was that you do not seprate your paragraphs corectly. every time someone new begins to speak it's a new paragraph. Aolso you usen the wrong word here and there. Other than that it was very good.