KITE'S ADVENTURE: prolouge

[kite5]

Kite's Adventure
Prologues
My life style is different than yours. Mine's at war still since 20 years ago. My place is different than yours. I can't even discribe how terrible it is, but it is terrible. I understand that the world sometimes need to go into war, but for twenty years is unbeliveable. Yes, we fight for freedom, but humans treat us wizards like mean, uncontrolable beasts. Even though we're different in our race doesn't mean we aren't like the humans. I want this war to end even if it means people will die. Even though I'm a girl, that doesn't mean I can't be strong. I never really knew what this war would have brought to me, but more hatered and madness. I thought that it would drive everone mad and we would all die. I'm not scared to die or be hurt. I'm most scared of what will happen to our world. I won't back down just so I can save our people, animals, and other creatures.


(thanks for reading my prolouge of the story i am making. i will read any comments and think about what u typed. i will be writing my story still, but this is the prolouge. :)

[suigintou]

Uh, is English your first language? Some of that didn't even make sense, and all of it sounded kind of...third grade.

Prologues, in my personal opinion, are only necessary if stylistically done, and pertaining to information that is necessary for the story but doesn't flow well in a first chapter. Nothing you said in here couldn't have been said in a first chapter or even later in the story. For example, a character's back story...that he ran away from an orphanage...that's something that is best left for the reader to find out a little later, unless you think of a really good way to present it up-front.

So uh, yeah, no offense, but that was...ugh.