[Luna_]

Originally Posted by KillionX6

First of all I loved it. Very nice.

As for criticism whether you were looking for it or not, ima give it to you.

1. Could use a little more hear, feel, sound. That way the reader feels as if they were there.

2. I like the jump straight into it, but A little more scare the hell outa josh woulda made me clench.

Other then those two you have it down. I liked it, gave me a supernatural feel. I would like to see more.

Thanks. ^_^