My story for Killion.
View Single Post
Anime Fuel Veteran
Originally Posted by
First of all I loved it. Very nice.
As for criticism whether you were looking for it or not, ima give it to you.
1. Could use a little more hear, feel, sound. That way the reader feels as if they were there.
2. I like the jump straight into it, but A little more scare the hell outa josh woulda made me clench.
Other then those two you have it down. I liked it, gave me a supernatural feel. I would like to see more.
"Good to talk to you before we all die."
-Keith and The Girl-
View Public Profile
Send a private message to Luna_
Find More Posts by Luna_