Uh, is English your first language? Some of that didn't even make sense, and all of it sounded kind of...third grade.
Prologues, in my personal opinion, are only necessary if stylistically done, and pertaining to information that is necessary for the story but doesn't flow well in a first chapter. Nothing you said in here couldn't have been said in a first chapter or even later in the story. For example, a character's back story...that he ran away from an orphanage...that's something that is best left for the reader to find out a little later, unless you think of a really good way to present it up-front.
So uh, yeah, no offense, but that was...ugh.
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