Hmmmm.........I like the ides for it but I can't really say that I loved how you wrote it. Try using stronger wordings and Try editing the flow of the words.
"Some are suicidal emo and goth
When some are preppy jock and invisable to sociaty
Some are punk rock and metal
When some are dance country and poetic
Some are nerds geeks and science freaks
When in the end we're all just human
Trying to fit in"
I didn't really like this because of the way you described the social groups.....Maybe try find easier terms or just cut that all together :P Sorry if I'm sounding harsh ^.^ I really do like it and this is just my opinion based of my own style So do whatever you feel you should do :P
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