It's good, but some of the language is a bit plain. Things like tears "welling up" are tired phrases, and "a large raindrop lands on my lips" is especially bland. This poem needs to be a bit more adventurous, I think. Try playing with verbs.
Also, stanza breaks, dear. It's easy to see where they belong, because you have natural pauses that suggest them. So why they aren't there isn't really clear.
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