Thanks guys, I really appreciate the feedback.
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Originally Posted by Bobadoe
But I am so very, probably, wrong.
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Don't worry about being wrong. That's just silly. You take from a story what you will.
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Originally Posted by wi_sam
You did a great job of ruling out the dialogue.
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Yeah I thought I did pretty well in that aspect as well. But I'm not sure I'll keep it that way. In a way, I want the narrator to say something at the end, something scathing to the hunter.
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Originally Posted by Koopaking
I think you could play around some more with the language and make it a lot better
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Perhaps. But eloquence has no place in this story, I think.
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