My New Anime!
 

Okay personally I think It's good.::D: Tell me what you think!
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Title: NightWatcher: A Phantom's Tale.

Plot: Humans have always thought there to a good side, there was a bad
side. Long ago, there were power struggles between a society known as Shadow Steed. The humans banished them to a realm where they could never be seen again. The elders passed a law to never tell the next generation of such evil. But the Shadow Steed were not gone forever. Before the night of a offspring with the Mark Of The Shadows 16th year of birth, it was chosen to rise and conquer the humans for their betrayal. But the elders were prepared for this back-siding. The night before a human with the Mark of Enticement 15th year of birth, it was chosen to defeat the Child of Evil. But it has been long and none have been chosen. Until now.....

New Anime--Story
 

Adriane,

It is good, and I like your adverbs that you describe the scene and the event. It's very well written, and I like it. You go grl! ::D:

I'm shore you did this in a halfsleep.......or I read it in a halfsleep.....
Try harder. It's too average.
I'm just bored......em....nevermind.

its good... i kinda understand the thought but try fixing some of ur sentences.... but still just keep trying and do ur best... ^___^

it needs improvement....good luck 4 d nxt try...^^