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ricecake 06-25-2010 02:16 AM

Untitled
 
I made a deal with the Devil once.
I asked him to help me find love and I got you.
And look how that turned out.
Just like the rest you stayed around
Just to get what you wanted then you left.

During the courtship of my deal gone horribly wrong
you were the perfect gentleman, no one would suspect
that you were a heart-breaker and a ladies man.
I fell for you in just a few weeks not knowing
the worst would soon come.
Listening to you sweet talk your way into my life.
fitting in like the missing piece to a puzzle, making everything alright.
but soon enough i wouldn't be enough.
with each day of you saying sorry and me falling back into this bad deal of love made by me.
weeks go by and i can't take it anymore.
Time to end this deal i made.

Because every sad story doesn't have a happy ending
and mine comes now after i break this deal.

Saying goodbye once and for all
this ends my deal
I made with the devil.

*this just came to me so it might not have all the rhyming down just yet. work in progress.*

Sadrith 06-25-2010 02:47 AM

Powerful stuff.

Tyranno 06-25-2010 05:02 AM

wow.............

ricecake 06-25-2010 03:27 PM

Thanks guys.

Tyranno 06-25-2010 06:06 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ricecake (Post 219911)
Thanks guys.

no problem!!!!!!!!!:kawaii:

Alibreon 07-20-2010 04:04 PM

REALLY good. :)

DjKuato 07-22-2010 04:18 AM

good job
that really hit home for me

WinterKiss 10-19-2010 08:18 PM

That's definitely deep and very powerful. You have a way with words

Jezilyn 05-28-2011 09:01 PM

That really hit home with me...You are really good at writing. :eyes:

yuan 06-08-2011 07:39 AM

It was rush hour and I was dashing to a train in New York City's Grand Central Terminal - As I neared the gate, a plump, middle-aged woman sprinted up from behind, lost her footing on the smooth marble floor and slid onto her back. Her momentum carried her close to my shoes. Before I could help her, however, she had scrambled up. Gaining her composure, she winked at me and said, "Do you always have beautiful women failing at your feet?"
just a joke,hope you like it.


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