Two more pieces
 

Because I hate just posting one poem at a time.


Wind

I felt the wind today.
It tore through me,
and tears welled in my eyes.
The shattered panes
of my chocolate-covered dreams
fell around me.
All around me.


Typical Cynic, 1969

As I walk the stones of solitude,
my eyes glow, indifferent.
Fleeced couples on stilts
stumble,
chasing their one-eyed dreams.

Colors melting off the walls,
wine becomes water, and we're gone.

i like that your poetry takes on different feelings all at once, not really focused on one thing!

the first brought a thought to me that made me chuckle, not gonna say what it was though!

the second one, my first thought was Pink Floyd another brick in the wall

Very nice job sui. Hope to read more from you : )

Where are Earth and Fire?

Oh yeah, gotta get on that now that it's September. teehee

But seriously no that was a bad joke.

Thanks, Rice and Zero. <3 Though I have no idea how Typical Cynic has much to do with "Another Brick in the Wall," or any song from The Wall for that matter.

Yep. But the bad jokes are quoted.... The good jokes are forgotten.

was it wet, that chocolate dream I mean?

Why is my thread being designated for bad jokes?

That could've been complete perversion and not a joke. just a thought.

That chocolate stands out like a white elephant. Draws too much attention, as if everything's centered around it. That's the only constructive and opinionated criticism I can offer. On the other hand, the second totally makes up for any petty judgments I can make about one word in the first. Very nice overall.
thanks

when i read it i thought of the boy that was made fun of for having poetry, or writing poetry, cant remember which, and every other student, "perfect" as designed by the teacher's rule, maybe its just me though!

oh and your entirely welcome! its no big deal for me to say what i like!