Anime Fuel Community - me & my persona fanfiction

um thx for veiwing this thread...um yeah i know the name of this thread sounds kind of sucky but please bare with me cuz im sort of new to writting fanfiction, so tell me what you think about the story after your done reading it =)

enjoy!!!

chapter one: enter minato arisato

the fanficion of persona 3 begins off when the main charcater transfers to gekkoukan high school in the
beginning of his junior year(11th grade).

minato:oh yeah! springs kicking off with a awesome day, the air is fresh & clean and the best part the people here are friendly & lively.
???: hey you there kid.
minato:yeah? whoa nice ass, i could cut that cake all night long.
???:what the hell...are you trying to hit on me because if you are i'am-
minato:oh i understand, you choose the road the doesn't carry over your bloodline,because your a...lesbian.
???:what!!! no i was saying that i'm way older than you are,beside i was a lesbian back when i was 15 years old now i'm 26 years old, now i like popsickos
and tacos.
minato:so your bi.
???: yup and proud of it,now moving on, i'am your homeroom teacher-
minato:homeroom teacher!? (my god)...i tried to hit on my homeroom teacher man that was close.
???:will you stop yelling outloud(sigh) it's only 9:30 in the morning,anyway i'am your homeroom teacher''ms toriumi''
and i'll leave it like that,see you in the next two weeks when school starts (bye).

two hours later in the day...minato went to the dormitory to move in, but in the unexpected moments he was being watch by a
mysterious green hair girl, who watch every move he'd made.

minato: hey you girl!
???: ...?! um me...
minato:yeah you,can you come over here for a second.
???:um...okay...i'm coming.

as this mysterious girl with green hair walks slowy towards minato.

minato:yeah um... i notice you been looking at me so hard that your sweating a storm
???:(thats not sweat at all hehehehe)
???:sorry it's just...you know ''i think your cute'''
minato:oh really,so whats your name ''mystery girl''
???:oh um...my name is fuuka yamagishi,but you can just call me fuuka.
minato:so ''fuuka'' right ?
Fuuka:yup (blush)
minato:so you live here by your self ?
fuuka:n-no,i live here with yukari takeba,mitsuru kirijo and...akihiko sanada.
just us four living here,mitsuru-senpei told me that people from our school can move in with us
but the school requires 10 people at max.
minato:so...i'm the next kid to live with ya.
fuuka:yup!! minato-kun (blush)
minato:?!
fuuka:oh...it's nothing(blushing)

so as fuuka explained the rules to minato, what he can or can't do in the dormitory.then all of a sudden two sexy looking girls come walking
in the dormitory holding hands while fuuka & minato get finished exploring the house together.one of the girls walks up to minato and says...

???:hey small fry,tell me your name? and also why did you unlawfully break into this dormitory anyway?
minato:you do know it's is unpolite to ask people there name before telling them yours first.
???:very well i'll tell you my name but first i have you know that the men in jail won't take that type of voice once they enter your batcave,
you piece of jail-bait waiting to be raped.
minato:(...ouch...)
???:anyway my name is ''mitsuru kirijo'', oh and this fine hot piece of ass you men would call her now and days, her name is yukari takeba.

as yukari softly tugging at mitsuru's dress and whispering these gentley in her ear, while hugging her from behide

yukari:mitsuru-sama...lets go upstairs somewhere quiet just the two of us alone...i'm sure fuuka can handle showing minato around town a
bit for a while. and beside i'm getting all wet just thinking about what i'm gonna do to your soon.

as mitsuru whisper back in yukari's ear while looking dead in minato's face.

mitsuru:so...what did you have in mind yukari-chan ?
yukari:lets just say words can't describe it, but don't worry i'll be all soapy wet just for you mitsuru-sama.
mitsuru:very well yukari-chan, but you go upstairs first and get ready for me.
yukari:b-but mitsuru-sama what will you do while i'm gone ???
mitsuru:hehehe leave it up to me to take care of that nasty boy ''minato arisato'' will ya.
yukari:ok....

as yukari quickly ran upstairs to take a bath and get ready from mitsuru, while mitsuru stayed downstairs to take care of minato & fuuka.

mitsuru:minato!!!
minato: *gasp*
mitsuru:now you listen here,i-
fuuka:um...mitsuru please don't treat him like those mean boys at school,he's not that type of guy.he's different....i'm sure he is.
minato:...(fuuka)....yeah please give me another chance mitsuru.
mitsuru:enough!!!
mitsuru:you thinks city boys like you can just come walking in here...my dormitory anytime you want.
well let me tell you something city boy, i'm the head bitch up in this piece and my rules are hard and the build character and
you better obey them or ELSE !!!!
minato:yes...i will obey.
mitsuru:now fuuka go upstairs and put on a better jacket than that...it's getting quite cold lately outside.
fuuka:yes..mitsuru.
mitsuru:and minato,may i have a moment alone with him fuuka ?
fuuka:sure..i'll just be upstairs looking for my jacket.

*as fuuka goes up the stairs*

mitsuru:alright city boy listen up cause i'm only gonna you this one time ok, i've seem to notice fuuka has a soft spot for ''quiet people''
so if you do anything to make her cry,get angry or anything bad.
mitsuru:i'll make sure the last breath you breathe...will be your last.
minato:...do you really intend to threaten me ???
mitsuru:intend to...motherfucker i already have!
minato:...alright mitsuru-senpei you win..for now.
fuuka:um...did i miss something???
mitsuru:oh it's nothing,just laying down some rules on him...so minato.
minato:hmmm ?
mitsuru:we'll continue this discusstion later on.
minato:yes...indeed we shall.
fuuka:oh...okay so your ready minato?
minato:sure anytime.
fuuka:alright so bye mitsuru-senpei
mitsuru:you two be careful out there.
fuuka:we will.

*door closes*

mitsuru:that minato boy sure is interesting....
minato:hmm you said something miitsuru?
mitsuru:oh nothing

end of chapter one....so what ya think =)