Help!

[BuBBl3s]

ok, my friends jessica needs help on her poem thingy and she is wondering if u guys could help her....and could write wat u think about the poem or if it needs to get fixed in anyway.......soo ya have fun

(btw) she is 9 and ir ead da poem and thought it was pretty gud for her but i also want to know wat u guys think too.


title:seasons
spring is when flowers grow tall
winter is when they all fall
fall is when leaves go brown
but summer is when u can here their sound

[giovanni r]

PRETTY GOOD I'M NO EXPERT ThOUGH. If you want inspiration,look at stanmarshes poetry!!!!!!!

[quietchat]

Why does she need to write poetry at 9?

But anyway, it's not a bad poem, but it's not really exceptional either. Have her read older poetry works so she can get an idea of how others write, not just how she writes.

[Vakarak]

It pleases the mouth with the easy rhymes but doesn't have that much imagery or mood.

[BuBBl3s]

quietchat: well she likes to rhyme stuff and her "teacher" told her she "could" write a poem for the "show and tell" so yeah..not sure y she actually did it but she did -.-