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LoveleSS75
11-10-2008, 01:28 PM
How much suffering are you able to take?
Is it worthy to through all away for somebody that doesn’t care?
Feelings make people blind and make them not to see what is in front of themselves.

How much can you trust when you have been betrayed over and over again?
Does it hurt or we don’t want to feel the pain?.

Love is a big word used with the wrong meaning too often,
And those who listen, fall in a deep trap unable to escape.

What can you get when you have been cheated?
Nothing can be conquer with lies, who is the one to blame?
Those who betray or those who wants to be seduced no matter what?

No over the moon, down to hell
Looking for a perfect paradise, running away …

Solinari
11-10-2008, 02:24 PM
Not bad. some of your gramar isn't the best, and your rhyme scheme is like nonexistant.

LoveleSS75
11-10-2008, 02:50 PM
Well i have to say that im not much into poetry what I write is what i feel, think.... at that moment so i dont pay attention to the rhyme...