View Full Version : Death to a Beauty
11-09-2008, 04:54 PM
As the clouds roll by a purple sky
A lone creature catches my eye.
It's large colorful wings are fluttering
As they bring a gentle hope to my heart.
The creature, a butterfly, flies high...
Until it is plucked out of the sky
By a hungry mother bird.
I stare as sadness returns,
"How unfair," I think
"That one must die for another to live"
But that is they way of the world
And it is inevitable...
11-09-2008, 10:42 PM
Nice Poem Jyuu makes a person think.
11-09-2008, 11:40 PM
thnx. I haven't written a poem in about 2 years, I'm a bit rusty but it'll wear off hopefully
11-10-2008, 02:29 PM
jyuu!!! nice work!!! it flows, the rhyme scheme is there. <3 it!
Nice! xD I like this one lol, it is sad, but true.
11-12-2008, 02:28 AM
This is a beautiful poem!
11-12-2008, 11:07 PM
Thank you all. I'm waiting on the inspiration for my next installment...
11-12-2008, 11:19 PM
thats really good n as Miki said it is sad but it is still true but its really good keep it up
11-12-2008, 11:33 PM
nice bro it really makes u stop n think ya kno
i enjoyed it alot
UR POEM IS SO STRONG IN A SENCE....ITS TRU how birds-people do things to each other that r to sad to commit ever for ur self....i give that poem infinite thumbs up if thats even possible....:oo:
11-13-2008, 11:35 PM
thanks everyone, inspiration hit me last night as I was going to bed. The new poem is here http://www.animefuel.com/forum/showthread.php?p=115176#post115176
11-14-2008, 12:07 AM
you just like making me cry huh?
11-14-2008, 01:55 AM
Reminds me of the philosophy of killing the spider to save the butterfly.
11-16-2008, 12:19 PM
woah! its great!!! nice poem and definitely meaningful...
Keep it up ^__^
11-27-2008, 09:41 PM
I like the meaning of this poem
11-27-2008, 09:45 PM
nice poem it really makes someone to stop an think....keep it up jyuu!! ^_^
11-27-2008, 10:09 PM
I love it!!!!!!
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