Hope

[stanmarsh]

Gonna be out for the weekend so I decided to write this to leave every1 with a little piece of me
Hope
Some clig to Hope as their only defence
To Hope for somthing greater it only makes since
to yearn to be great
but before they act its to late
the curtains closed the ship has sailed
all in all we've all just failed
you wait for you end covered in tears from you past
the hours move like seconds its going to fast
the blood dripping from you hand
the pain of lost hope stinging like a broken rubber band
yet you can run down the hall and get that light you see
that lights good for you but its to late for me
Been sitting on this one for a while plz comment

[runt32a]

thats really good

[FoX66]

I dig the rhyme scheme. I like to be over the top with it.

Ex; Instead of... (A rhymes with A, B with B, ect...)
A
A
B
B
C
C
D
D

Do something trippy, over the top, and completely unnecessary!

A
D
B
C
B
C
D
A

[stanmarsh]

I'm addicted to writing couplets everything I write just comes out like a couplet so I just roll with that I envy my girlfriend who can write good free verse

[AkiTorrien]

Like I said in the other thread you made for your poem. I think you have a very good ability to write.

[jyuukai]

ahh my emo friend, that's a good poem. You've got me writin em again ^^

[Klay Vampy]

Wonderful work as usual Stan! Great job and soon enough i'll be putting up some more of my poems again. ^_^

[saprintha]

that is really good. even though it disturbed me a little (no offense), but overall it was really good.

[leoern]

Good job lane