Love

[stanmarsh]

I love this girl with all of my being.
A love so strong it affects my seeing.
Just the sight of her is enough to make my heart drop.
I'd do anything to make her tears stop.
I want to tell her but it wont come out.
A love I want to tell the world about.
Yet anyone can clearly see.
This girl will never love me.

[animex09]

-sniff- deep words man -sniff-

[jamjfly]

Its sad man. I like it though.

[stanmarsh]

Most of my stuff is sad.

[Waste]

Most of my stuff is sad.

It is easier to write sad things sometimes, but very hard to make them meaningful. Keep at it.

[KiriJolith]

*sniff* nice work stanmarsh! it made me want to cry :( *sniff*

[leoern]

....glorius man....just glorius

[Solinari]

I love this girl with all of my being.
A love so strong it affects my seeing.
Just the sight of her is enough to make my heart drop.
I'd do anything to make her tears stop.
I want to tell her but it wont come out.
A love I want to tell the world about.
Yet anyone can clearly see.
This girl will never love me.

AAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWW, that's so sweet. it really speaks from your heart. keep up the good work!

[aya143]

so cute but speak it out............

[Dolly]

I think you could have replaced a few words to stay with the rhyme scheme and avoid repetition--but otherwise, I really liked it.

[Zieghart]

*got stab by the poem* OUCH.... NICE ONE!!!

[Tomboychic]

I love this girl with all of my being.
A love so strong it affects my seeing.
Just the sight of her is enough to make my heart drop.
I'd do anything to make her tears stop.
I want to tell her but it wont come out.
A love I want to tell the world about.
Yet anyone can clearly see.
This girl will never love me.

THat was soo good XD
It really gets to me ;D
Have any more :D

[BuBBl3s]

i liked ur rhyme scheme...ur poem was really romantic and yet sad T.T