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cloud7nine
10-16-2008, 08:01 PM
DEATH
Death is the ruler you see,
death is a killer in me,
Haha, but death can't take me from you,
you see.

YOUR WORLD AND MINE
If my world was your world,
Your world was my world,
I can't change yours
but you've changed mine

DRAINED
"My life with out you is like a drained waterfall"

IN LOVE
You know you are in love
when you see the world in her eyes,
and her eyes everywhere in the world.

HARD THINKING
It was all hard to think with you,
now i found it harder here without you,
please don't fear I'll be here,
thinking about one thing,
and that thing is dear.

LIFES LESSON
Their is a small lesson to be
learned everywhere you go
yearning toword that lesson
is the difficult task at hand,
when finding this lesson
you must keep it hidden,
for their maybe more to it
just be patient and life
will unfold the way it should,
and lifes lesson will be untold.

YOUR TOUCH
When the sun shines down
I look over and see you frown,
Telling me what you've done
thinking that i'll just run,
But you've touched me where no one can,
my heart is yours and not just mine,
keep on moving is what we need
we'll grow old till we have to leave.

IN THE RAIN
In our home one sunny day
looked outside and it started to rain,
The rain was cold without a coat
I gave you mine so you wouldn't gloat,
In the rain was our first kiss
you were laining before this bliss,
so leave me now with this kiss
I'll believe you when your missed.

LONGER DAYS
As the days grow longer,
being without you is harder.
I know it'll be a endless road,
but isn't that what it's like bored.
With you I feel no pain,
Without you i'll be living in vain.
And these days grow longer,
I sometimes wonder why bother.

YOUR EYES
When I gaze into your eyes,
I feel the blaze of the lies,
seeping into my little heart,
keeping us for miles apart,
what will your eyes tell me,
when I can't stand to be easy,
Fragile parts are already broken,
so why do you say you won't hurt me.

INSIDE OF ME
I've held this rage inside of me,
why don't you come beside and see,
what I'm like without your heat,
then I'll hike away in defeat.
After all this time I meet,
the perfect patch for inside of me,
sewing it will be real cheap,
If you come I'll have to leap.
If only you could see,
what it's like inside of me.

LOVE LOCKED BEHIND THE CLOSED DOORS
(this title was chosen by a friend)
The first person i could actually tell i loved
it kills me to see her with another
she tells me she doesn't want to hurt me
but she hurt me when she told me that
i feel like life is over now
without her i shouldn't be sober
i am writing a poem you see
this one won't be a keep to me.

HEART BEAT
my heart feels like it's stopped
can't breathe without that clock
don't know when this will stop
hope it won't hurt when i'm not

WINDS COLD HEART
Breezing winds through the air
Freezing chills upon my bare,
Winds blowing through my hair
Binds me to my chair
Hopeing that I won't care.
Seeing the winds cold heart,
Helps me when I'm not part.

LOST TREASURES
I found you in the strangest place,
seeing your face was no disgrace.
Helping me when I'm down,
always turned my big frown.
but now I feel in me no more,
the treasure I had I have adored.
lost at sea with no paddle,
will be the mistake I had saddled.

FALLING IN DEEP
The world is a huge sphere,
how did we just appear.
Finding you was just wierd,
don't mind me I am near,
so you won't have to fear.
This is me telling you,
that I am just falling,
for this girl I'm calling,
hope she won't hang up balling.
Cause I have already fallen,
for this girl I'm calling.

INTRO TO MY LIFE
I poped right out,
and gave a little shout,
why do I have this feeling.
Life with me, can be neat,
but life with you would be better.
Hearing you, loving me,
made my ears ring gently,
please don't think, I'll leave,
Cause you should know I love you.
Now you know, what I knew.
This is only an intro to my life.

FINDING MY HEART
Losing something inside of me
would seem to be just weak.
But being me is seeing that
I have a fragile heart.
Please don't be a memory,
cause I don't know where to start.
My heart is not a toy you see,
it is what make me be me.

Sleeping lover

While you were sleeping I felt your heart beating.
While you were sleeping in my head love was repeating.
While you were sleeping all I could do was smile.
While you were sleeping I watched you for a while.
While you were sleeping I always held your hand.
While you were sleeping I knew where my heart would land.
While you were sleeping you would hold me near.
While you were sleeping I would cry all my tears.
While you were sleeping from you I knew I wouldn't part.
While you were sleeping I gave to you my heart


Unknown
something about you that make me shake,
something about me that makes me laugh,
something about us that makes it perfect,
something about it that makes it right,
something about life that makes you wonder,
something about death that makes you hinder,
something about everything that makes me wonder,
why anyone would give up on you in thunder.


Before a choice
before i met you i saw you sweat two,
after i saw you i just knew i had for you.
sometimes seeing you makes me spit at sarrow,
anytime i kiss you i love to swallow.
right now seems like it never will end,
forever never seems like it ever starts.
loveing you is what i like to do,
living with you is what we'll have.
in this poem you see my feelings,
in this poem sre hidden helpings.
after reading it makes me think,
what life would i have if we never thought.
_____________ is her name i speak,
forever is what i think of when its said.

cloud7nine
10-16-2008, 08:02 PM
warning....some are half finished....

KiriJolith
10-21-2008, 03:04 PM
They aren't bad. Some of them don't make like, hardly any sense, but they aren't terrible.

wi_sam
10-21-2008, 03:42 PM
thy r funny , but i think thyr good..lol