Some Poetry of Mine.

[Holly-Sama]

To be honest, these poems are a little over a year old. I haven't written any poetry recently sadly enough. Anyway, hope you enjoy~


The Reception's Pretty Dead.

Wedding bells and scary tales

A nightmare which forever dwells

Of a groom and his dear bride

Both face down in formaldehyde

Exchanging vows in eulogy

Perhaps together they'll always be

Love is such a tragedy.


Cut the cake and pour the wine

Just as the dead, it grows better in time

Let's make a toast for our dearly departed

What comes next, not for the fainthearted

May your glasses be filled to the brim overflowing

Prayers will not reach where you two are going

A honeymoon in Hell is your next destination

Too bad it's forever; not just a vacation.


Sin

To an all night apothecary we'll ride

Away from every danger, toil, and snare

Ridding our minds of meaningless lies

To deliver ourselves from evil

Count the days until we meet again

And together we'll repent our sins

To love thy neighbor with a bitter kiss

A betrayal that makes the blood run cold

The vial in your violent grasp

See the glory of the ending of our lives

And seize the serpent by its tongue

[Tsukiko]

I love them!!! Very well done. I think the first one is my favorite! It's a shame you haven't written anymore recently.... think that might change?

[Areku]

Totally awesome. Let's be friends.

[Holly-Sama]

Thanks guys! I may start writing again when I don't have so many papers to write, lol.

And I think we're already friends...

[Areku]

Yeeaah profile friends.. 'tis not the same.

[Proto]

Agreed, both were great, i prefer the first one though :D

fav part of the poem!

A honeymoon in Hell is your next destination

Too bad it's forever; not just a vacation.

[Tsukiko]

I look forward to your future works..... after you are finished writing your papers ^_^

[suigintou]

Very nice. I wanted to mention that in your first poem (nice title by the way), the first stanza seemed so much better than the one following it. Perhaps that's because of the rhythm...it's mostly continuous and is rather close to being iambic quatrameter. That being said, it seems like a separate poem, because the rhythm shifts quite drastically afterward.

Not saying that the second stanza is bad, but it's just not as good as the sheer greatness of the first bit.

The second poem...classic method of romantic suicide, a la Romeo and Juliet. Except to repent sins instead, this time. The poem overall seems...vague. At least until you realize just what's going on. But that's good...it builds suspense and doesn't totally give the secret of suicide away too fast.

[Holly-Sama]

Very nice. I wanted to mention that in your first poem (nice title by the way), the first stanza seemed so much better than the one following it. Perhaps that's because of the rhythm...it's mostly continuous and is rather close to being iambic quatrameter. That being said, it seems like a separate poem, because the rhythm shifts quite drastically afterward.

Not saying that the second stanza is bad, but it's just not as good as the sheer greatness of the first bit.

The second poem...classic method of romantic suicide, a la Romeo and Juliet. Except to repent sins instead, this time. The poem overall seems...vague. At least until you realize just what's going on. But that's good...it builds suspense and doesn't totally give the secret of suicide away too fast.

Each stanza of the first poem was written at two different times. I guess that's why the stanzas are a little different. Guess I got carried away, lol. I guess I could turn that second stanza into a part two or something.

The second poem is sorta like a Romeo and Juliet kind of thing, but my inspiration was Biblical Hymns. I like to be vague so that the readers can interpret the poem in their own way.

Thank you though! And I always favored the second stanza because I liked the 'Honeymoon in Hell" bit.

And the first poem is my favorite as well. I wanted to add more to it because I initially planned to turn these into songs...er, eventually.

[KittyODoom]

I enjoyed the first one.. it made me kinda smile in a sad way.... Its funny how poetry touches everyone differently no?

Anywho I likes it!

[badluckcat]

really good poems Holly-sama :D....

[carolyn07]

...for the reception one,.

its,.i so love it!,.its funny in a sweet way,.its very true!,.its my favorite between the two,.

for the sin,.

its,.oh my gosh!,.i love it too!,.

to sum it up!,.

your great!,.

write more!,.ill be waithing!,.♥

[Holly-Sama]

Thank you very much.