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Areku
10-07-2008, 05:13 AM
In french it was a rhyming poem, now I can't translate it into rhymes so.. it's an unrhyming poem I guess.

My Sweet Rotten Darling

You’re so pretty, or at least you were
I must admit that you scare me a bit now
With all these wounds and shreds of flesh
It’s streaming everywhere, it’s spraying from your heart

I’d love to hold you in my arms
But getting close would be fatal
Anyway you don’t even have arms
You’re just staring at me with your eternal, empty eyes

And in your cage you grunt, you moan
You’d like to get out for some fresh air
Or fresh meat?

Oh how I’d love to kiss you again
But how could I? You lost your lips
Your face is all decomposed
And your jaw just fell apart!

My Mama told me so
"Find a real girlfriend, and dump that zombie!"
But I couldn’t resist, you always attracted me
Since the night I saw you, eating that terrified man

I walked to you, said "hey"
You said "gnhhshfffgnnn" and threw up on me
Noticing at my feet these chewed organs
It was my turn to puke, we laughed a lot

Now memories come haunting me
Where are your blond curly hairs?
Where the hell is your head?!
Ah, it’s nothing, it just fell down

I’ve started to worry a lot
Our relationship is getting dangerous
I never know if you’ll still love me tomorrow
Or if you just want to eat my liver

Many days have passed
I’ve found a solution to our problematic love
I can now talk to you, come closer everyday
To you, my own stuffed zombie girl

soulten
10-07-2008, 05:56 AM
That ending is awesome, creepy but awesome.

You are somebody I wish I went to school with.

Areku
10-07-2008, 06:05 AM
Haha, thanks.

lemonek
10-08-2008, 06:44 PM
its sick dude, but yeah, awesome

Holly-Sama
10-08-2008, 10:35 PM
What can I say? I absolutely love this!

suigintou
10-08-2008, 10:38 PM
Very interesting idea behind a poem. It worked surprisingly well for being translated, although it is unfortunate that we don't get to see it with quite the "oomph" that the French original likely had.

Still, nice work. :3

wi_sam
10-08-2008, 10:40 PM
its sickiningly cool ....lol

Areku
10-08-2008, 11:05 PM
Thanks guys, comments like these give a motivation boost for writing.