Bleeding

[stanmarsh]

Sitting alone a loss of feeling
Its starting to burn and my skin is peeling
you've cut me deep with your mindless hate
I'll live alone and thats my fate
living and lying
without you i'm dying
telling myself that i'm okay
that seems to be the only way
you tore my soul apart
how could you do this to my heart

-my second attempt in poetry tell me what you think

[Orangeii]

ah i just felt just depressed just now. :(

[stanmarsh]

did you like it?

[Orangeii]

did you like it?

it was amusing.

[Russkie]

http://cookingforbrevitt.typepad.com/photos/uncategorized/emo_lawn.jpg

[stanmarsh]

i really dont care what you think i like writing poetry it makes me happy if only for a moment

[dog009]

I like it. i have write some too but not this good, keep it up :)

[KiriJolith]

Sitting alone a loss of feeling
Its starting to burn and my skin is peeling
you've cut me deep with your mindless hate
I'll live alone and thats my fate
living and lying
without you i'm dying
telling myself that i'm okay
that seems to be the only way
you tore my soul apart
how could you do this to my heart


Nicely done man. This could actually be put to a pretty decent beat and make a song. It would have to be expanded on of course, but it's the start of a decent song.

[meraychan]

hey i like it...it's reli good...^_^

[stanmarsh]

I'm not good at thinking of lyrics to add to my poems ill try to keep them comming i really enjoy writting poetry (makes me happy)

[Russkie]

I myself enjoy writing a poem every now and then. Buts its weird how they turn out. Its not something you expect from something like me.

[stanmarsh]

Thats why only anime fuel shall know my poetry

[Tsukiko]

I really enjoyed your poem. Great job.

[bluedragon]

it was good it brought tears to my eyes but really good keep up the good work

[leoern]

good job on the poem

[Zieghart]

They Are Right!!! It Is The Best!!!!! ^.^

[Klay Vampy]

I'm like you Stan. Poetry makes me happy and helps me get my emotions out. I loved this poem. Yet again i can tell you put yourself in your poem and it's dark and deep. I love the work. Keep it up Stan. ^_^

[runt32a]

i liked it its really good

[giovanni r]

Wonderful...... as always. So i'm not the only one who loves them?? hmmmm

[BuBBl3s]

that was a very amusing poem .weirdly it made me happy...and yet sad at the same time ..hmmmmm ..u maybe could make a song out of it but u have to add like a BUNCH of stuff to it though

[☺Shigeki☺]

hey i kinda like this its pretty good i know someone who does poetry but she never puts here good suft up only the sucky shit =I i dont know why shes really good though