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badluckcat
10-04-2008, 08:38 AM
madness , insanity
the smell of blood takes my reasoning away
like a fallen angel
who falls from heaven to a world disgrace.
i find it so pretty
the red color of your sweet blood
it takes me completely
it conquers my heart .
like a drug addict
it became my only reason to live
my only door out of reality
my only escape from the bitter guilt.
i leave my mark on that slender neck of yours
the white skin stained in blood
makes me feel even worse
i want it , god i want it so much
that red sugar , that sweet taste
just one more touch
and i see myself in the mirror
the reality kills me from inside
what kind of monster am i tonight
hungry eyes , and desperate look
when did i became like this
that was all that it took
to make me feel sorry
to make me want to erase the image of that ugly thing
scratching till tears fall down my face
but the picture of that devil
just won't go away
repeating repeating like a movie without end
the act of the sin i cannot stand
it's to much for me
to see that side of life
where evil confronts evil
it looks right in my eyes
the drug that i dreamed of once
the blood that i most loved
the red sugar that made me smile
it makes me really scared
the desire that i have
to take them all from you
it's stronger than guilt and fear
and that brakes me in two
i have to get away
run away from this sweet temptation
forget your tender neck
the whiteness of your skin
lock away that precious taste
forget the red sugar that you bleed.

dog009
10-06-2008, 05:52 AM
sorry to say but i think some parts don't rhyme, but hey if we try harder we may get better. :) or maybe i just lack of understanding. :)

KiriJolith
10-06-2008, 01:54 PM
that's actually a really good poem badluckcat. Atleast I liked it. Going with a vampiric theme i'm guessing?

badluckcat
10-06-2008, 02:26 PM
that's actually a really good poem badluckcat. Atleast I liked it. Going with a vampiric theme i'm guessing?

thanks KiriJolith :)....

Axe Man
10-06-2008, 02:34 PM
not bad kido it's looking good.

meraychan
10-06-2008, 03:16 PM
i love it it's reli nice....keep it up...^_^

Areku
10-06-2008, 05:43 PM
Nice one, and for the one who said that some parts didn't rhyme, a poem doesn't always need to rhyme.

spike81x
10-06-2008, 05:49 PM
Not bad!:fruit::ramen::dancing:

Holly-Sama
10-10-2008, 10:11 PM
I love it. I'm a huge fan of dark poetry.

ChelsChels
10-11-2008, 03:01 AM
dude thats awesome i loved it

badluckcat
10-11-2008, 08:55 AM
thank you guys :)....

aezgaga
10-14-2008, 01:28 PM
It's cool :) Keep it up ^^

badluckcat
10-14-2008, 02:27 PM
ok i'll try my best :)*smiles *

bluedragon
10-14-2008, 02:29 PM
its nice poem practice more and ull be supper good