Can't help falling in love

[~nekochan~]

I looked into your crisp blue eyes
There's something I have never seen,
a kind of joy that can be shared
with people who have never dared
to love

Since it's you and only you,
I found the strength to smile.
There's something to fill my empty heart
A feeling I have never felt
to anyone
I can't help it
Can't help falling in love

Since it's you and only you,
that makes my heart flutter
My heart pounding so hard
I might just burst.
The red in my cheeks
Oh so rosy
Is caused by you
and only you

I can't help it...

No I can't....

Can't help falling in love...

[suigintou]

This is very much a lyrical poem, you know that? I think this would work quite well as a song.

One piece of advice: there's no rule saying you have to start every line with a capital letter. You might find it easier to show us where to pause when your lines continue as if they were normal sentences, you know?

Something like this:

I looked into your crisp blue eyes;
there's something I have never seen-
a kind of joy that can be shared
to (with?) people who has (have?) never dared
to love.

It just flows a bit better if you ask me. But you don't have to take my advice. And just try to be more careful about typos, like the two I pointed out above.

You have a good sense of line breaks, and you have potential. Overall, a good piece, but it needs some revising.

Hope I was able to help. :3

[soulten]

Subject verb agreement. Learn it well

[lemonek]

very nice, but love is fake

[bluedragon]

its a nice and wonderful but like lemonek said love is fake

[animex09]

ur a lifeless manikin if u say love is fake. i enjoyed the poem alot.

[kuristar]

hehehehe.... love is in the air!!! :P

[KiriJolith]

That was a good poem. Keep up the good work.

[carolyn07]

...i like it too,.but as soulten said,.there are some wrong grammars,.

but nevertheless,.i love it!,.

love is never a fake!,.even though i dont have special someone,.i still believe in love!,.

you can say im a hopless romantic,.admitted,.but i satnd to what i said!,.♥

[Klay Vampy]

This is really good. I agree it would do well as a song but it's also good as a poem. Great job Neko-chan!

[Russkie]

very nice, but love is fake

There is truth in this statement.

[Ryuuzaki]

very nice, but love is fake
but like lemonek said love is fake
Wow... Emo much?

Very nice poem, Neko. I enjoyed it a lot. :3 You should write some more. Like one about your favorite Brother, hm? Yeah that sounds nice... lol

[AkiTorrien]

That was a good poem ^^

[milo]

I cannot help it ethier I feel your pain their is this girl I like that is out of leaque with me

[KiriJolith]

I looked into your crisp blue eyes
There's something I have never seen,
a kind of joy that can be shared
with people who have never dared
to love

Since it's you and only you,
I found the strength to smile.
There's something to fill my empty heart
A feeling I have never felt
to anyone
I can't help it
Can't help falling in love

Since it's you and only you,
that makes my heart flutter
My heart pounding so hard
I might just burst.
The red in my cheeks
Oh so rosy
Is caused by you
and only you

I can't help it...

No I can't....

Can't help falling in love...

Very good job!!!!! It's well written, and deserves praise. It can identify with so many people in the world (including myself) and is just a very good poem.