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[spirit]

Ok. I believe no one likes to read ridiculously long texts, right?
So, here something really short. Like a haiku.




On the bottom of my soul
I trim the smile' strings
into pearls... of own tears

[strike7785]

Ok. I believe no one likes to read ridiculously long texts, right?
So, here something really short. Like a haiku.




On the bottom of my soul
I trim the smile' strings
into pearls... of own tears


I wouldn't exactly say that I dont like reading long stories or poetry but It sounds great keep it going make it longer

[spirit]

no way.... why longer ^^ haha JK

[Raven]

Wow, I like it. I can see two ways it can be taken... How did you mean for it to be taken?

[spirit]

Wow, I like it. I can see two ways it can be taken... How did you mean for it to be taken?

yeah, I know... that's just the same what my Vocal teacher told me after she read the whole thing.... 'cause that just the part of something much longer.. which I have a really hard time finding.... ehhh...
I remember... she was sitting at the piano... and she cried while she was reading it... then she just came up to me... and started to hug me (which was a lil bit awkward, haha)
I think.... it's more depressing... 'cause the state of my mind at that moment was pretty heavy.... something I wrote in a moment... when I couldn't cry my tears out anymore... cause i've cried so much... they didnt want to come down anymore....... and the smile... something fake... that our american society expects from everyone.... no, demands!
"how are you?" - it doesn't matter if I'm on a floor... lying in a pool of my own blood.... still I got to respond "Hii, I'm good..... no! excellent! How about you?" Don't you dare uncover your true feeling.... neither complain.... you can't - it's "wrong"..... however if you try.... everyone will ignore it.......

[Russkie]

Hmm... I don't know too much about these things, I guess its good.

[Raven]

yeah, I know... that's just the same what my Vocal teacher told me after she read the whole thing.... 'cause that just the part of something much longer.. which I have a really hard time finding.... ehhh...
I remember... she was sitting at the piano... and she cried while she was reading it... then she just came up to me... and started to hug me (which was a lil bit awkward, haha)
I think.... it's more depressing... 'cause the state of my mind at that moment was pretty heavy.... something I wrote in a moment... when I couldn't cry my tears out anymore... cause i've cried so much... they didnt want to come down anymore....... and the smile... something fake... that our american society expects from everyone.... no, demands!
"how are you?" - it doesn't matter if I'm on a floor... lying in a pool of my own blood.... still I got to respond "Hii, I'm good..... no! excellent! How about you?" Don't you dare uncover your true feeling.... neither complain.... you can't - it's "wrong"..... however if you try.... everyone will ignore it.......

I see, I want to read the whole thing and get depressed and cry too!
You need to find it! That's a wonderful topic for a depressing topic and I would greatly enjoy reading the entire text.

[monsoon 10]

Ok. I believe no one likes to read ridiculously long texts, right?
So, here something really short. Like a haiku.




On the bottom of my soul
I trim the smile' strings
into pearls... of own tears

Why think in haiku
When I speak in normal prose?
Better not to ask.

Not made by me but still better.

[Blooddrunk]

Oh I really like it! Keep the good work ^^

[alsharid]

it's nice, this reminded me when I had an english project last year(I had to make a haiku)

[tripletres]

hmmm... sry, i thought that it was too deep for me. then again, im a very shallow person. just give a string and ill be content for a few hours.

[jamjfly]

That was really good, keep it going!!