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Ariya
03-24-2008, 02:58 AM
A lost cause that never finds;
troubled dreams and faded lines.
Forever drowning and cursed to be,
losing touch and touch to see.

Tortured mind and hungered soul;
loss of love; burnt out coal.
Tears of acid running dry,
reality fading as I cry.

Hollow screams echo here;
smell of never-ending fear.
Smile of chaos; burning blood;
lies of misery; feel of mud.

False hope and blinding pain;
courage hiding and bravery drained.
Sighs of passion thirsting for life;
blurry visions, an unending strife.

Imprisoned happiness locked up tight;
lost the key, end of sight.
Whispering voices; a trembling sound;
fading faces that cannot be found.

Decieving friends, family of solitude;
fake smiles and false gratitude.
Lingering worry and deafeaning silence;
forgotten hurt; scars of violence.

Thoughts of madness, feelings of war;
captured imagination becoming sore.
Moving images, captivating danger;
alluring time; reflecting a stranger.

Cruel sincerity, a broken sign;
blaming judgement, wisdom of mine.
Sightless scars; devastating disasters;
unconcious loyalty; confiding masters.

Ignored death, unheard scream;
finite forever, listless dream.
Apathetic wishes, selfish lies;
A selfless prayer with no reply.

illuma
03-24-2008, 05:19 AM
This poem is really well written. It was a little depressing but it was way too impressive for me to say anything negative.

Ariya
03-24-2008, 03:04 PM
Thank you very much. ^^

Koopaking
03-25-2008, 12:35 AM
Why don't you ever write about happiness and sunshine and rainbows Ariya?

Ariya
03-25-2008, 12:50 AM
Because poetry is my way to vent out those dark feelings. :/

archangle
03-25-2008, 05:24 AM
very nicely written...a bit dark mooded for me but pretty nice

illuma
03-25-2008, 07:13 AM
Because poetry is my way to vent out those dark feelings. :/

Thats fine and all, but maybe some of your loyal fans would like to read something uplifting. Not saying that how your writing already is bad; i completely enjoy reading it. A change in mood might be good though.

Ariya
03-25-2008, 01:29 PM
//Thats fine and all, but maybe some of your loyal fans would like to read something uplifting. Not saying that how your writing already is bad; i completely enjoy reading it. A change in mood might be good though.//

I see. I'll write a poem when I'm in a good mood for you all, okay? :D

Bricaine
03-26-2008, 03:08 AM
:snaps fingers for a beatnick applause: Safest way to shed the shadows is through verse, well written.

Bixarre
04-17-2008, 01:18 PM
So dark. Very, very well-written. This is the first that I've read of your work, but if the others are right, even if it may seem a bit unnatural at first, you really should try to work on showing good feelings when you write as well as these dark ones. It helps you to remember those good feelings.

Rock
05-06-2008, 11:47 PM
Heh as i expected, this really really beautiful one and in that special manner of yours.
Really im fan of ur work, keep em in this pleasant manner:P

Jack
07-16-2008, 04:08 AM
I like it. I like a lot. ~<.<

-Jack

jamjfly
07-16-2008, 05:59 AM
DAMN!!!!!!! How do you write so good?!! Again, I LOVED it!