See beyond

[giovanni r]

I have been writing poems for awhile and i have never gotten the time or courage to do it , but Jessebaby helped push that fear away so i hope you like them!!






Everything isn't what it seems
Not up close or far away
When something doesn't feel right, you walk away
See beyond the lies to find the truth

Most of us are fed up with lies
Cause all we do is wallow in them
And no one know cause they are painted like a jem
See beyond thew stories to find the truth

Death and hurt is all they bring
They find the right moment to attack
After everyone has turned there backs
See beyond the huirt to controll the pain

[ricecake]

Very nice gio, a few misspelled words but very nice. Hope you post more ^^

[giovanni r]

oh i am about to!! I was just nervous thats why the words were misspelled . I have been wanting to post them since before at least a year ago!!!!

[wi_sam]

Simple, but nice enough. Good job.

[giovanni r]

Thank you !! I got a whole lot more Coming!!!

[Starfire]

Very nice gio, a few misspelled words but very nice. Hope you post more ^^

I second this. Overall 8.9

[JessaBaby]

Lol I told you! Its good!
Watch your spelling because it can disrupt the flow of the poem
Keep it up! I will always be encouraging! Just keep up the talent :)

[giovanni r]

Really, my poem.... good????? Sorry! I misspell when im uber nervous

[JessaBaby]

Really, my poem.... good????? Sorry! I misspell when im uber nervous

Lol I do that too Google is my spell check :P lol And don't doubt yourself as long as your comfortable with yourself and your writing it will always be good and it will give others hope to try write whats in their hearts because sometimes writing can save someone from falling into their own pain :P
Sorry about the long over exaggerated comment ^.^ Lol

[giovanni r]

Lol no worries you are the expert!! Yeah, pain is cruel if you have got nothing to pull from it i guess, that why i write!!

[runt32a]

well done and very nice

[giovanni r]

Thank you!!! Yours too!!

[runt32a]

your welcome and thank you

[giovanni r]

*smiles*lol!!

[runt32a]

-smiles back-

[giovanni r]

.....Lol ......

[giovanni r]

Thank you!!!!