in pain after death

[the murder]

(its called suffer after death)some more death metal inspired goodness ::D:

Ripped apart
Torn to pieces
Slashed skin
Can no longer feel the drill digging in
Numb and close to death
I can see my slabs of flesh
Draped upon my killers arms
Eyes out by a scalpel
No more sight
Sounds so horrible
But I cant even scream
Within darkness the torture continues

Hours have past
Why am I not dead
There is no end boy
Whispered into my ear
My head chopped off
Senses disappear
I slowly awaken
See the ravenous smile
The mutilation never ending
I think I’m in hell

Chained to a table
Locked in a cell
Screams from all over
A figure of black
Towering, and horned
Howls in my ears
Eats my legs, bones and all
I remember the whisper
I am in hell

As I bleed out
Pain and ache
Nerves on fire
This is eternal
I wish this blackout my last

As my eyes open
I am again renewed
I feel the tears flow
As I hang upside-down
Thousands of feet above the ground
On me winged creatures feed
Open for all to see my intestine hang free
All at once a million voices scream
Sentenced for death, eternally

[fazenda]

....uhhhh

when i first read that I thought it was emo but i started thinking that an emo poem wouldn't have parts that indicate the dislike of pain "I wish this blackout my last".

so I just started to think that you where struck by inspiration after hearing dean's story of how he was stuck in hell.

over all it's not my kind of thing but I'm sure some goth will enjoy a poem about someone who is actualy worse off than themselves.

I won't say its bad but i just don't prefer it(no matter what you do or who you are there will always be critics)

[suune]

I'm not gonna judge it, since I'm not a fan for these kind of poem. It's always easy to criticize but you have to understand what you are praising or not.

[LoKiWorlD]

Trapped in an endless state of pain and agony, unable to escape from hell. I'd have to admit that i actually liked this one. Obviously, this is some form of purgatory, eh?