chess

[BuBBl3s]

:drop: not a very great poem.but i want sum advise on how i can fix it up a lil bit



life is just a chess game...
we win
we loose
but it's not up to use if we survive
we may win
but not eternally
we may think we're happy
but we're just pawns..
who is this player that leads us tothe battle field
are we prepared to face anything at anytime
or are we just going to get kicked of the board,
replaced
or forgotten.
life is just a chess board

[quietchat]

Well, the symbolism is pretty solid, but I also think it feels rushed. Maybe you could add a couple more lines to it?

[BuBBl3s]

Well, the symbolism is pretty solid, but I also think it feels rushed. Maybe you could add a couple more lines to it?


mhmm..yeha i am trying to figure out how to add to it without ruining the main idea,,,,but yeah