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Hakeru
12-22-2008, 06:14 AM
I heard those voices,
but theres no one there.
I never saw their faces,
but, i felt those stares.
and, i tried to run,
but the was no where to go,
i hid these scars,
but they all seemed to know.
i followed your voice,
but i couldnt find you,
i tried to smile,
but, they all knew.
i saw your face appear,
and i tried to call your name,
but nothing seemed to come out,
nothing sounded the same.
i glanced at the knife,
and saw my reflection in the blade,
i picked it up in my hands,
and in this crimson;; i fade.

kuristar
12-22-2008, 07:25 AM
nice work... keep it up

BuBBl3s
12-28-2008, 09:28 PM
wow..that is a really gud piece...could maybe make a book!!:D
keep it up

Shield.Me
02-22-2009, 09:21 PM
;) As I've been saying .. Good work.

fazenda
02-23-2009, 12:19 AM
I think it is good and you put allot of effort into it.

letting you know on line 6 the second word is missing some letters

nena-X3
02-23-2009, 04:18 AM
Wow.. good writing.. I like it..

BlueSano
02-23-2009, 09:32 AM
nice hak...nice work keep it up ^^

smada85
02-28-2009, 02:52 PM
thats good i like it

Abarai
02-28-2009, 04:39 PM
this is...interesting :)